Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors! Thought I’d share some more of that same scene from last week–eight more sentences that are…troubling.
Alyse’s betrothed, Sir Geoffrey Longford, has been called away to his father’s home because his brother is ill. Geoffrey’s friend and Alyse’s champion, Thomas has just arrived with news and handed her a parchment letter. Alyse reads it with some trepidation as Princess Joanna and the other ladies wait in the next chamber.
In her bedchamber, Princess Joanna waited with Maurya, Anne, and Margaret. The women’s faces had changed from puzzlement to fear. Joanna looked from one maid to another, trying to hide her despondency. So many prayers had not been answered today.
Anne finally summoned the courage to ask, “Your Highness, what has happened?”
A wrenching wail of anguish shattered the hushed room, as though the very walls echoed the sound. The four women stood rooted to the floor at the almost-inhuman shriek of grief.
The sound cut off abruptly, and in the eerie silence that followed, they heard the soft thud of a body hitting the floor.
Yes, I’m being bad this week with that cliffhanger. 🙂 If you want more before next week, Betrayal is available at Amazon on SALE today for .99.
In the mean time, check out the rest of the Warriors here. There’s some fantastic snippets to be read.
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Omigosh!! Don’t leave me hanging!! Great 8!
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Oh, what a cliff hanger!
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Poor thing. But she’s strong. Quite a cliffhanger this week, Jenna.
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“…the soft thud of a body hitting the floor…” Sounds like they had good reason to be anxious. (It’s off to Amazon I go). 🙂
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A tense scene and really bad news 😦 Very nicely presented.
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Love, love, love the way you described the sounds. Excellent.
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Oooh you got us with this one! Most excellent, Miss Jenna. I do adore your writing style.
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Well done! The anguish comes off the page.
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High drama, obviously something really dire has happened. I’m on the edge of my seat, needing to find out – well done! Great excerpt…
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You did a great job of ratcheting up the tension to the final thud. There’s no way I’d stop reading at this point!
I’m a first-time participant in Weekend Writing Warriors and I’m really enjoy it.
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I read that the end of every chapter should be a cliffhanger big or small to make the reader eager to turn the page. And you are with an outstanding one from another time and place. Just right.
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.99 cents? What a bargain. I think I will go buy one… (if you’ve ever heard Eddie Murphy’s standup tape, from the 80’s I believe, that line should be read in his voice). If not, doesn’t matter. I will gladly part with .99 cents today to read some more…
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Fantastic.
Tweeted.
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Thank you, Daryl! 🙂
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Heart wrenching. I wonder just what was in the letter, but I fear the worst.
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You are right to fear the worst, Sadie. Alyse has great sorrow to overcome now. Thanks for coming by!
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I love the way you set the scene, and that cliff hanger ending is very effective!
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Thank you, Alexis. Although many do not, I love a cliffhanger ending, either at the ending of a book or at the end of a chapter. I like to leave readers wanting more. 🙂
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Yikes! That can’t be good:(
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Trust me, Eleri, it’s not. 😦 Thanks for coming by!
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I’m waiting to hear what happens in the next book. 🙂 I know that things are going to get dicey!
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That’s correct, Melissa! When you add in the Bubonic Plague, all bets are off! 🙂 Dicey for sure. 🙂
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Jenna, this is actually next on my list to read. I’m definitely looking forward to reading all of this scene.
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Thank you, Gemma! I do hope you’ll enjoy it! And this scene is only the beginning! 🙂
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I really liked this book, too. I haven’t had time to review it, but you have another 5 star coming for this one, Jenna. 🙂 Good excerpt choice for #8sunday. 🙂
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Wow! Thank you so much, Teresa! I’m so very happy you liked it! 🙂
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I enjoyed this novel and great cliffhanger. Shared.
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Thank you, Andrea! Appreciate the share!
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Now that’s a cliffhanger! Nice one, Jenna!
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Thanks, Jennifer! 🙂
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Loved this book! Tweeted and shared on FB.
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Thank you, Ella! 🙂
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That must be some of the worst news she’s ever received. I hope they’re able to revive her after that faint.
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It is devastating news, Carrie-Anne. And it’s touch and go with her for a while. Thanks for coming by!
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