Welcome back to the Weekend Writing Warriors again. And Happy Memorial Day Weekend to everyone!
Once again I’m taking my 8 from my new WIP, Speed Date. I’ve skipped ahead in this scene: Roberta is at Gabriel’s apartment for dinner, although she’s only just met him. In this scene, he handed her a glass of wine then made an outrageous statement. (For the previous post–and that outrageous statement–click here.)
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I was caught with a mouthful of wine and nowhere for it to go. He had said that on purpose and it would serve him right if I spewed all over his expensive carpet.
“If it comes out your nose, Bertie, I promise you I will laugh.”
He grabbed my glass as I bolted for the kitchen, making it to the sink just in time. Laughter rolled out of me as the not-too-dry wine dripped from my lips. I grabbed a dish towel to save my blouse. “That was evil, Gabriel.” I wiped my face; my eyes were now streaming with tears of laughter too.
Thanks so much for coming by! I’ll be at my annual writer’s retreat next weekend–four glorious days of non-stop writing! So I won’t be posting on either SSS or WWW as we are out in the woods with no internet. The week after I’m back to SSS, so please come by for more of Speed Date then.
Remember, I’m taking a semi-hiatus by alternating weeks between WWW and Sweet Saturday Samples this summer. And the alternating seems to be working–I finished the revision of Betrayal yesterday and it’s off to my editor! Today I start a new WIP! I guess a vacation is a good thing. 🙂
Right now, you can click here to hop on to more Writing Warrior posts! And thanks for coming by!
Jenna Jaxon Romance--because passion is timeless. 
Something funny on a first date always breaks the ice. Nice way to show it without just saying she laughed. It brought me right into the scene.
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I’m over half done with Betrothal, and love everything but the word betrohtal –I constantly misspell it. (but then I also misspell the word mispell all the time to.) I spend a great deal of my life backspacing and retyping. But Betrhaol takes three try normally to get it right. You have no idea how many ways I can muck that word up. However, to your current WWW snippet. It’s engaging, fun and way to short. I prefer reading your books in entirety.
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Wonderful moment captured brilliantly by your descriptions! Fun!
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Laughter on a date is the best. Great 6
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Funny! I went back and read what he’d said–had me laughing, too!
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That was a very fun and effective bit of “stage business”, much better than just stating she laughed (I definitely agree with Kayci). Terrific snippet – this is a fun story. Enjoy your writers’ retreat!
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Wonderful scene. Way better than just saying, “she laughed”.
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Glad she made it to the sink and saved the blouse. It’s good that they both have a sense of humor.
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Great snippet.
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This was a fun “made me smile” snippet. Cute – thank you for posting it.
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Fun scene — so realistic. Enjoy your retreat!
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A fun excerpt there.
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Have fun at your retreat. I like this story.
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He makes her laugh – the most important thing in a relationship
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I’m glad she feels so comfortable with him on the first date. I imagine most people would be mortified at something like that happening so soon.
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I’m with Ella. I’m starting to like this guy. He makes her laugh and that is always a good thing!
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I had to go back to read what he said. OMG, maybe she should have spit on his carpet, lol. These two are cute together. Very curious to what happens next.
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It’s better as a joke. If it had been serious that would have been seriously twisted, especially to admit it first.
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Although I don’t know what he said, I laughed anyway. That’s how well you’ve written this scene.
Bravo!
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I love this snippet. Not only is it very visual and realistic, but it made me laugh. Great job!
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You captured me right into the scene. I almost moved back so the wine didn’t splash on mu jammies. Good eight, my friend!
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I love the natural chemistry between them! I can’t wait to read the whole thing!
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Awesome! “wine dripped down her lips” Love laughing that hard! Great 8! 😀
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That was very cute. I’m starting to like him.
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LOL… I’m really liking this story, Jenna!
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