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Today I’m continuing from my newest WIP, Speed Date. This snippet immediately follows yesterday’s Sweet Saturday Sample (view here). Roberta is at a speed dating event, her first time, and in this 8, her first “date.”
George, a sandy blonde with greenish eyes, kept clicking a ballpoint pen as he said, “So, have you done this before?”
“Never,” I replied, trying to smile as if that didn’t make me sound like I was finally desperate enough to try anything. “Are you from the area?”
“No, I transferred six months ago from Ft. Belvoir, but I’m originally from Oklahoma.”
“I was born and raised in Tidewater and I now live on the Eastern Shore.” I was supposed to tell these men the truth, right? What if he was a serial killer? At least he didn’t know where on the Eastern Shore.
Hope you enjoyed Roberta’s first foray into speed dating. But the night’s not over yet.
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Jenna Jaxon Romance--because passion is timeless. 
Very vivid and true to life. At least I assume so! 🙂
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I’d feel awkward on a speed date too. It seems like it’d be hard to find a real connection when you’re meeting so many guys in such a short time.
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I haven’t read a speed dating story before. I could feel the discomfort here. At least she didn’t give out her address!
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I could almost feel her tension about not wanting to reveal to much when she was talking.
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Great dialogue. It feels real and uncomfortable which makes the scene enjoyable 🙂 (at least for readers)
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Jenna, am so loving this story. Ready for the next snippet!
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Yeah can’t wait to see where you’re going with this. And still amused you decided on first person in this story
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Ha! I have to go with those who want to grab that clicking pen away. Nice detail. 🙂
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I’d have to take that pen away from him! This sounds exactly like the kind of thing you’d say if you were speed dating, which for the record I don’t think I could do. There probably aren’t too many serial killers there, but lots of awkwardness for sure.
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Great details. I’m with Ella, but I’d probably snatch the pen away and give him a chance to talk!
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I wouldn’t be brave enough to try speed dating. I would be thinking they were all questionable. I’m not that trusting. lol
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Hey I grew up in Oklahoma:) Great eight.
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LOVE this Jenna!! I can totally relate with the heroine’s inside thoughts!! Always second-guessing and questioning herself. Beautifully constructed and perfectly executed 🙂
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If a guy kept clicking his pen talking to me I’d leave. Wonderful snippet. Tweeted.
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Loved it, especially the pen clicking detail, very telling. Can’t wait for more, terrific snippet!
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Speed dating. Gives me the shivers. Good luck Roberta. Super eight. You captured the awkward moment.
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Ooh speed dating! That’s pretty scary! I admire her trying it out. I can’t wait to see what happens!
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The pace if the snippet is about the pace of a speed date. Great job.
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Dialog is perfect. Exactly the kind of conversation one would have — as well as the concerns.
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Ooo! Love this premise! Definitely want to know who Roberta end ups picking. Great 8! 😀
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